tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post5115112547531050044..comments2024-01-26T13:12:55.520-08:00Comments on Feel Free to Read: Write & SleepGlenn Buttkushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-42727701514952428312015-01-09T19:58:13.067-08:002015-01-09T19:58:13.067-08:00she sounds like quite the character!
love how you...she sounds like quite the character!<br /><br />love how you illustrated the story/scenarios so well with blackout words.<br /><br />really enjoyed this!Stacy M.S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/17768743830360856158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-85926855254877218402015-01-09T09:29:20.860-08:002015-01-09T09:29:20.860-08:00I agree it would make an excellent short film, it ...I agree it would make an excellent short film, it was dripping with atmosphere and pathos. Excellent erasure poem!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17392858163745232319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-4224938563667638702015-01-09T08:18:13.238-08:002015-01-09T08:18:13.238-08:00If you used an entire Brown short story it must ha...If you used an entire Brown short story it must have been a bit like juggling to keep the continuity of the story so that no obvious source is being used. Nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-37364050679819751652015-01-09T05:11:24.313-08:002015-01-09T05:11:24.313-08:00Is this blackout poetry? I can't tell, which ...Is this blackout poetry? I can't tell, which is high praise, I guess. :) Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-43866766087636316732015-01-09T04:49:48.044-08:002015-01-09T04:49:48.044-08:00Nicely done, and some of the phrasing is stunning....Nicely done, and some of the phrasing is stunning.Miskyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10280369979543928659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-50457805197984695072015-01-09T03:25:47.774-08:002015-01-09T03:25:47.774-08:00What a melancholy story you weave here, Glenn, so ...What a melancholy story you weave here, Glenn, so real it did not feel pieced together but sadly smooth! I can relate and ache reading this one...lynn__https://www.blogger.com/profile/03991892804149727665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-86015764641866656272015-01-08T21:12:17.895-08:002015-01-08T21:12:17.895-08:00What a lovely voice you have brought into this poe...What a lovely voice you have brought into this poem. His feelings are coming across gently. Which book is this?Prajaktahttps://anarmchairperfectionist.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-45480331335071866632015-01-08T19:20:20.577-08:002015-01-08T19:20:20.577-08:00Interesting how the writer got lost in her own wor...Interesting how the writer got lost in her own world. so obsessed she lost love in the real world. I always know I am in for a treat when I visit here. Hope you are well?Truedessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09079953417572207613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-21209311743431970852015-01-08T18:49:22.967-08:002015-01-08T18:49:22.967-08:00Yes, it is very coherent and complete, making a te...Yes, it is very coherent and complete, making a terrific poem.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-60561381795848580242015-01-08T17:17:39.675-08:002015-01-08T17:17:39.675-08:00Oooh I could feel the slipping away, it can be har...Oooh I could feel the slipping away, it can be hard to see it at the time.Kathryn Dychehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17175563748388497142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-64866945159611404322015-01-08T16:07:47.955-08:002015-01-08T16:07:47.955-08:00Who would think this to be erasure poetry? It'...Who would think this to be erasure poetry? It's so cohesive. And so very real. I know that, since I've begun writing, my social life has--I won't say "withered," but diminished some. Sometimes we have to make that choice. I think my husband likes the fact that I rejoice when he goes golfing. Sometimes it's hard to write with interruptions and, well, what can I say...?Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-77148111409394380052015-01-08T15:18:16.587-08:002015-01-08T15:18:16.587-08:00hmmm... i may need to consider this piece... my hu...hmmm... i may need to consider this piece... my hubby isn't reading my stuff any more either... it came together nicelyWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-8243318502601361082015-01-08T14:50:21.382-08:002015-01-08T14:50:21.382-08:00It made me think that writing demands a lot from t...It made me think that writing demands a lot from the writer, and change someone so dramatically ~<br /><br />I enjoyed the story Glenn ~ Have a good day ~Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-91008244790281172142015-01-08T13:01:23.307-08:002015-01-08T13:01:23.307-08:00Ditto to Mary's comment. How the heck did you ...Ditto to Mary's comment. How the heck did you do that? : )Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-63494246440706665672015-01-08T12:37:25.640-08:002015-01-08T12:37:25.640-08:00I enjoyed the story, or should I say the script. Y...I enjoyed the story, or should I say the script. You could easily make a movie out of it. I have a few French actors in mind.Gabriellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09968615376035959259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-8598991693811604212015-01-08T12:19:15.688-08:002015-01-08T12:19:15.688-08:00I don't know what text you used for this, but ...I don't know what text you used for this, but whatever you used you managed to weave a story that made sense - which is not always easy in blackout poems. Smiles. Anyway it sounds as if one way or another she worked herself to success!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-18999289982111349282015-01-08T11:27:53.105-08:002015-01-08T11:27:53.105-08:00ha you got a whole story at of this one man...i co...ha you got a whole story at of this one man...i could feel as well the seperation happening....and trying not to love her...if you figure that one out, let me know....cant keep friends like a can of worms....ha...i like that line....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-44364298147518568102015-01-08T10:58:54.786-08:002015-01-08T10:58:54.786-08:00cool quote to start this off..
and heck..what a st...cool quote to start this off..<br />and heck..what a story.. it is sad when we get so absorbed with things that we don't see the people around us any more... he should just pack up a picknick and whisk her away for a bit - and the butterflies and birds and all do the rest... smilesClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6327165758377801408.post-40598358128042339852015-01-08T10:03:39.172-08:002015-01-08T10:03:39.172-08:00What brilliant sense you made of your text. The na...What brilliant sense you made of your text. The narrative of a budding author or poet getting distanced from the one that's close.. Maybe good authors need to be self absorbed.? - would love to see a reference to what book page you picked too... Cheers brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.com