Monday, September 5, 2011

Love Hurts: Scene Two


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Love Hurts: Scene Two

Cinemagenic Two

Samaritans

1(medium shot) large coiled rattlesnake shaking its tail.
2(sound cue) Indian snake rattle duet with castanets.
3snake’s head (close up) reptile-cold eyes, darting tongue.
4(medium shot) woman with arm and hand shading her eyes
staring in the direction of the distant dust cloud.
5(sound cue) acoustic guitar chord; repeated thrice.
6(tight close up) woman’s eyes, tense with frustration and fear.
7(close up) young girl’s face.
8daughter: mama?
9(hold shot on child as woman replies)
10woman: yes, dear.
11daughter: do we have to stay here tonight?
12(sound cue) jazz drummer playing brushes.
13(close up) woman’s mouth, luscious lower lip pulled in tight
to upper lip.
14(two shot over child’s shoulder)
15woman: No, Heather, someone is coming right now, and I think
they will give us a ride.
16(insert shot) red and white gila monster lizard (tight medium shot)
scampers between sage brush.
17(sound cue) sibilant hissss.
18(two shot) mother and daughter (hold for dialogue)
19daughter: mama?
20woman: what?
21(sound cue) cello playing sadly behind dialogue.
22daughter: I’m hungry.
23woman: I know, baby, me too, but it won’t be much longer.
24daughter: mama?
25(medium close up) woman’s blank stare.
26daughter: Tony is hungry too.
27(close up) child is holding up her stuffed tiger; one eyed, frayed ears.
28daughter: Is Bob going to catch us?
29(sound cue) Indian snake rattle shaken hard.
30woman: No...no, he will not find us, or ever hurt us again.
30(medium close up) woman squeezing the child’s hand.
31(sound cue) a long slide on a six string blues guitar.

Glenn Buttkus

September 2011

Listed as #42 over on Magpie Tales 81

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9 comments:

  1. hot...great tension build scene...and continuation from last week...

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  2. Oh, the Tony part nearly made me cry...I'm enjoying this series, Glenn. Nice.

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  3. Poetic Screenplay
    Reads like extended Haiku
    Thanks to Glenn Buttkus

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  4. These are very engaging for me, perhaps because I have a rich and wholly indulged imagination, and a very strong tendency towards and reaction to the visual -- in addition, 'sound' has played a huge part in my entire life... good stuff, enjoyable Glenn

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  5. Snake, rattle and roll

    Fist Bob 's punching bags
    Never to be hurt again
    Slide guitar drops key.

    Jim

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  6. it really is great going back through this story and remembering how much i enjoyed it....nice tension and hold on the emotions in this...

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  7. This is sooo frustrating. Dribs and drabs of a story, I mean. When can I go and see the film?

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  8. Is that acoustic guitar chord a major or - as I strongly suspect - a minor?

    Love the details in your writing, Glenn. Looking forward to the next installment.

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  9. a felt piece and you made it so easy for us to really see the scene...love the rattlesnake inclusion, the details like the cello and jazz drummer..cool

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