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Zorba’s Wisdom
Fourth Triolet
“Clever people and grocers,
They weigh everything.”
always lifting their leg, those curs,
Clever people and grocers,
but without a sweet smile like hers,
they remain forever just a ding-a-ling;
Clever people and grocers,
They weigh everything.
Glenn Buttkus
March 2012
Listed as #16 over at dVerse Poets-FFA
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"Clever people and grocers,
ReplyDeletethey weigh everything" ... again, your repeated lines are perfect.
And boy is this a great line:
"but without a sweet smile like hers" ... wit without beauty may masquerade as folly
Some days, I think I could say absolutely anything and be found clever ... unless I'm having a bad hair day or have missed the mark on my makeup applique.
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
Ah, weighing can be either a blessing or a curse. Nice triolet. I notice this is your second one. it is a form that resonates with me as well and plan to write more. For now, here is mine:
ReplyDeletehttp://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/03/lost-city.html
Very clever write!
ReplyDeleteVery clever! I really enjoyed this--funny but there's a bit of winsomeness in the "like hers" too. Very nice. K.
ReplyDeleteVery clever! And this underlines how easily you've taken to the form, as if it were instinctive. Good work!
ReplyDeletewell I hate to overuse a term, but this is very clever and a wonderful triolet! ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteThat Zorba's got a point...enjoyed both your triolet's through the spirit of Zorba...
ReplyDeletenicely done ... tricky form this and you've done it proud ...
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