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Rougarou
“The Rougarou saw his shadow; four more weeks
of crayfish season.”--Cajun saying.
Werewolves are not real. This is the prevailing axiom;
but I’m here to tell you, for some of us, monsters are
real. Like UFO’s, those of us who’ve seen them have
a hard time convincing others.
Last year I visited an old high school sussie, who lives
alone in a clapboard cabin deep in the Louisiana
swamp. He hunts alligators and snakes for a living.
I arrived at his hut after dark. There are no roads.
I had rented a boat. There were a couple of lantern
lights on inside. I could hear spirited zydeco music.
I tied off the boat on his dock. Approaching the front
door, I shouted: T. Leon! Ca Va, you old couillion!
There was no answer. I slowly opened the door.
Leon was on the floor on his back with his throat
ripped out. There was a fire in his stove.
I heard a close by blood-curdling wolf-howl,
followed by loud growling. I fled for my life,
but Leon haunts my dreams, and his shadow
shouts on a nightmare scream.
Glenn Buttkus
Prosery
Posted over at d'Verse Poets Pub
I love that opening Cajun quote. I like how you draw the MC into the darkness, where such horror is revealed, then leave him with a lasting haunt. Good horror story!
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ReplyDeleteThis is a great story, Glenn … but it exceeds 144 words, you scamp!
Excellent story Glenn!
ReplyDeleteWell told, my blood is still curdling ....
ReplyDeleteYou're right, Bev. I had kept count until I typed it up, then some words were dropped, others added, and then did not recount. I'm a bad boy, for sure.
ReplyDeleteI can hear that scream.
ReplyDeleteNice folksy tone, Glenn. We're sitting by a fire, with a glass of something warming, telling ghost stories, and I half believe you. Later on, when I'm walking home alone down a dark lane, I'll know you were telling the truth.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you took the Cajun saying and developed it into an original scary story, Glenn! The opening paragraph makes excellent use of verisimilitude, setting the reader up for a ride into the darkness of the Louisiana swamp.
ReplyDeleteI didn't count the words... didn't feel too long for me. Love the setting with the cabin in the swamp... but honestly... it could have been a gator...
ReplyDeleteGreat story. And yes, hard to convince someone of your reality when it differs from theirs
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent! I love the tone, and I can imagine someone actually telling this story.
ReplyDeleteAnd ending with that scream--I feel like I can hear it.