image borrowed from bing
Stairwell Stanzas
“Breed not a savage dog, nor permit
a loose stairway.”--Talmud quote.
She stared at
the
street
but never
saw
what
was there.
When a sprinkler
bec
omes
abstract
art
all
the robins
begin
to
become
art
critics.
The seventeen
cables
got
busy perfecting
a
new
knot of metal
fellow
ship.
Rusted Fords
make
the
best homes
for
lots
of angry
hungry
spiders.
Ah hell,
swing
your bale
up, Bob;
there’s
plenty of
space.
Then we all went out & gobbled pizza,
the end.
Glenn Buttkus
Posted over on dVerse Poets MTB
Today, Gay wants us to develop our own form of poetry; I call this Stairway
Verse. It is superb descendant dissonance.
Would you like the author to read this fun poem to you?
15 comments:
ha. cool form...i love the concrete and playing with the way words look on a page...it adds artistry...ha and i have met a few spiders in old cars...and check under the seat for snakes too...just saying...and everyone is a critic...smiles.
I thought this was great "shaped" poetry. Is there a formula for the descending staircase? Does it work going up as well. I like it a lot especially the second as it is very complete and architectural. Apt to the subject matter as well.
Any time is a good time for pizza!! Whatever reason works for me.
I like your style - poetic style, that is. Still cogitating here.
After a brilliant climb like this I would also need pizza.. Loved the flow of this.. Would be challenging to do in wordpress..
Gay, no mathematical formula for the form, just lining up the words as typed on the page; which did not transfer cleanly from my document to the blog site, by the way. I considered ascending stairs, but felt
it would be confusing, read backward, too pretentious.
I'd love to eat a pizza praying I do not meet your hungry spiders on the way down.
love the idea of robins becoming art critics. Fun poem!!
Well one can certyainly climb down or up it Glenn. Nice job. >KB
Oooh, Glenn, I admire your patience in making sure this worked visually, as well as enjoying the narrative! I almost immediately dismissed the idea of 'shaping' my poem - not least because I wrote it on my phone! Haven't had pizza for a while... :)
Probably right Glenn (about the prententious bottom to top - still presented left to right (and not as
many steps) it might work. I like it and will try it somewhere along the way. Thanks.
I always loved concrete poems, mainly because I could never get them right, not as you have done, excellent visual image a swell.
first...this has a really nice visual appearance.
second...the verses are quite nice. I particularly like the robin as a critic.
I'm just a robin, but I'm not marking a statue :)
Glenn - this was innovative and fine
Ha! Great fun - I especially love that final step on safe ground back on earth...
A fun poem in various ways!
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