image borrowed from bing
Cuckold Coupe
“In marriage, the greater cuckold of the two
is the lover.”--Paul Gauguin.
The feisty flathead V-8 sped up as it dropped into overdrive.
It had a thunderbolt on the hood, flames on the side,
a 1950 Ford coupe streaking through the rainy night.
He had to find her, the bitch had lied;
fists clenched on the steering wheel, vengeance to wage--
a broken heart, yes, but pride still had to be saved.
She would be sorry after his angry point was made.
How could she be so cruel with such an angelic face?
There’d be no punching, she wouldn’t need a nurse.
How could such a demon want to be married in a church?
As torn up as he was, he knew she’d soon feel worse;
he wanted to hold her down & crap in her purse.
One thing for sure, he’d get his ring back,
“Becky, you knew better than to treat me like that!”
Glenn Buttkus
Posted over on dVerse Poets MTB
19 comments:
Glenn.. this was a masterfully done.. what a story... but crap in her purse ... he he.. that's some kind of revenge. We both used overdrive as the first word... felt nice..
What a fast paced piece! This guy means business, that's for sure. Becky can begin to worry or run away as fast as she can.
crap in her purse...hahaha....oh my....cool car up front....nice tension throughout...great story telling and hiding the rhymes...solid piece man.
ah that sounds serious.. lying in a relationship is something that causes a lot of destruction - i like how you start with the car - sets the stage for the following emotions nicely
Fab - u- lous!!!
Glenn, this is wonderful. Your images are sharp and punchy, the story is engaging and fast-paced, and you've made really great use of the end rhymes; every one of them feels completely natural.
Very well penned, my friend
You tell a great story here...it's as if the 14 words were yours to begin with!
Hey our poems could be a duet of sorts! Or sliding doors sort of thing - if only one way - if the other that way. I think this was very cool. I know that car of course..my granddad had one. Well done!
Glenn, your characters are always hot-blooded and visceral- the pace, the storytelling, and the inner dialogue all elevate this to something more than poetry. It just grabs you!
the car is as cool as your writing Glenn. I'm hiding my purse however...
perfect - tempo, imagery, emotion - a tight write, Glenn ~
Fast pace throughout I could almost
feel the car racing down the road to
catch her..yikes..laughing at the crap in her purse..a bit of revenge..
Some hilarious lines. There'd be no punching,she'd need no nurse!LOL
Ha, ha, can't believe you managed to make a little movie scene with those words! Brilliant, though destructive emotions in this piece.
Hah - gals and their lies. Revenge is often sweet - hope she gives the ring back - better than a crap in her purse.
Most excellent story telling Glenn.
Anna :o]
Whew, she definitely will regret her lie. He will see to that!!
Great story! I think the first stanza is my favorite, and the picture of the car set a great tone. Peace, Linda
I knew it would be something like that after the "cuckold" quote.
A great pace and story-line. The feeling of revenge and the idea of crapping in her purse very well portrays his anger.
Well-penned.
Not good to lie, Becky...he's got it in for you...and your purse! Could see his jaw clenching...
this was quite a fun read...intense...
I really like the opening stanza. could feel the rage that follow more intensely after feeling the rev of the engine.
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