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Blackthorne
Cinemagenic 102
Pistoleros
“A shootout is not a gunfight of honor, it is the
work of backshooters.”--Jessica Savitch.
1(overhead drone shot) wide shot, Johnny behind
the tree, Buck behind the carriage; silence between
gunfire.
2(sound cue) guitar strumming over Voice Over:
Buck: Are you still with me, old one?
Muffled horse cries.
3(cut to medium close-up) Johnny: I am shot to
hell, but they cannot kill me.
4(jump cut) a ranch cat screeched and hissed as
it bolted out of the bunkhouse.
5(sound cue) fiddle and Indian branch flute.
6(roving overhead crane shot) Neither man spoke
for a long moment. The barn roared and crackled
with flames. The horses were silent. The ranch
house began to blow out windows. Bullet casings
clicked as they were shoved into cylinders and
rifle breeches.
7(close-up) Buck: Sonofabitch--you were too right!
8(medium close-up) Johnny, clenching his teeth,
reloading his Winchester, but saying nothing.
His wounds were beginning to stiffen up. The
front of his shirt was blood-soaked.
9(sound cue) snare drum and banjo.
10(medium one-shot) Buck: Cover me! He began
running, crouching as he ran toward the house.
Firing resumed suddenly from many directions.
11(cut back to roving crane shot) the wrangler
in the woodshed attempted to pin Johnny down,
while the three in the bunkhouse sprinkled shots
all around Buck as he now sprinted; no sign of
life from under the front porch.
Buck made it to the north side of the house.
Angry slugs split the siding as he ducked behind
it. The gunman in the woodshed appeared, and
squatted behind a tall chopping block, hoping to
get a better shot at Buck. The Eagle delivered
30-30 lead to his stomach as he crouched. He
stood up. Johnny shot him in the throat. He
fell over the chopping block, and crumpled
into a heap, as his rifle barrel was crammed
into the hot dirt.
12(sound cue) it went quiet again, just the
sound of the wind, and grumpy chickens.
13(wide shot) Buck worked his way along
the west side of the house. He paused at
the south corner. The intense heat from
inside the house penetrated the walls.
Buck bobbed his way out from the corner,
both guns cocked and leveled at the front
porch. No one was there.
14(cut to the burning barn) the barn’s roof
caved in, crashing down, as the greedy
flames leaped higher.
15(medium wide shot) a gunman, the one
from under the porch, was crawling on his
hands and knees across the corral, holding
his side where Buck had wounded him.
Buck snapped off a pistol shot, and it hit
the man in the butt, knocking him flat into
the horse shit. The man struggled to get
back up to his knees.
16(sound cue) snare drum bap & coronet bleat.
Using both hands, Buck held the Thunderer’s bead
on the man’s head. Hey, asshole! The slinger
turned his head and a Colt .41 slug made a new
hole between his eyes.
Are you still alright, Johnny?
The Eagle waved a Yes.
17(one-shot) Buck quickly vaulted over the corral
rails, then snaked his way over to the body.
18(one-shot) Johnny fired into the bunkhouse, and gunfire
was returned.
19(sound cue) castanets & Indian seed rattle.
20(medium close-up) Buck picked up a pistol,
a Navy Colt, off the dead brigand. He continued
across the corral on his belly, with a gun in each
hand.
21(cut to a wide shot) Two men rushed out of the
back door of the bunkhouse. They ran fast & low.
A third man, still inside, kept Johnny pinned
down with rapid gun shots.
Glenn Buttkus
Posted over at dVerse Poets Pub OLN
10 comments:
Oh.. this is turning into a real shoot-out, but it seems like Buck and Johnny know the game better than the wranglers coming.
Of course they would have a Navy Colt. I assume this is after the Civil War. Nothing like a bunch of shooting to liven things up!
I’ve been waiting for this episode for two weeks! Thank you, Glenn, for the anticipation and the excitement of the episode. I’d forgotten how intense Westerns are. I feel so sorry for the poor ranch cat caught in the crossfire.
This episode is incredible and the real shoot-out has gotten to be the movie event
we've all been waiting for. Incredible and vivid writing my friend.
Miss your work Glenn. :)
Thi kicks ass and takes names dude! Holy hell yes - or unholy hell yes! I have said this before, but you gotta get this made. Netflix, Hulu, and Prime seem to be suporting independent fils. This would be a great modern take on a classic. C’mon bro — contact one of these!
The grumpy chickens is a nice touch, a bit of "fowl language".
I notice a lot of creative sound effect combos between sections. Never noticed it consciously in movies before. I am heartbroken over the horses caught in the barn, The Eagle all shot up, and Buck's ranch torched. I hope he shoots first and asks questions later when it comes to exterminating whatever that guy's name is for hiring/ordering this to happen. What court would convict? Very exciting chapter, Glenn!
Oh gosh he's hit! But still going strong with a Navy Colt. Your action sequences are really something, Glenn! The images are vivid and allow the reader to visualize the scene. Looking forward to reading what happens next!❤️
That is some intense fighting and shooting scenes Glenn. Keep up the good work.
That's one heck of scene you penned out for us. I can feel the flames igniting along with the spirited flames of the characters.
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