Saturday, July 26, 2014

Blackthorne--a 55



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Blackthorne--a 55

“From birth to age 18, a girl needs good parents;
from 18 to 35 she needs good looks;
from 35 to 55 she needs a good personality;
& after 55 she needs a lot of cash.”--Sophie Tucker.

Sheriff Hop
seems to be
a badass;

Deputy Marcus
appears to be
a prick;

Barber Barnes
is gut-shot--we
hope he’ll survive;

Rod Buck
is staring into the barrels
of his own weapons,
hands on his hips,
eyes defiant;

Storekeeper Wallace
is speaking up for Buck--

& we have yet
to meet his daughter.


Glenn Buttkus

Posted on over at dVerse Poets OLN

25 comments:

Grace said...

Tight write Glenn as I was expecting your usual cinematic approach ~ Looking forward to the next chapter ~

Happy weekend to you~

Wolfsrosebud said...

a little character development here... concise... you must be busy... LOL, nice to see another style of your writing.

annotating60 said...

Glenn, a great story played out in a slimness of language takes on many suppositions and grows fatter in the imagination. >KB

Victoria said...

Great little character sketches here, Glenn. Makes one want to know what's going to happen next. And as for Sophie Tucker's saying...what can I say? Bring on the $--we're remodeling!

Kate Mia said...

Well..first of all so true but sad in the words of wisdom that start..and from the sound of the parenting arrangements and reality.. of the daughter...

she may need some good fortune 2..:)

but anyway..hope you enjoy! your dVerse adventure today..!

Beachanny said...

Complete - very compact and telling. A tragedy told in 55. Mighty fancy writing, sir! Liked it alot!

Björn Rudberg said...

A great condensation of the story up till now. I miss writing.

Mary said...

You really have left us in suspense once again, Glenn! I like the short glimpse of each character & can hardly wait to meet the daughter. Smiles.

Bridge2vision said...

Wow, tight and flavorful - and leaves me wanting more! And that daughter...which of Sophie Tucker's demographics does she fall under?

Gabriella said...

I must read a very good English novel which just lacked what you presented us with: a brief list of the characters involved and their characteristics.

C.C. said...

Great concise character vignettes....and the last line is a powerful foreshadowing that inspires curiosity in the reader.

alan1704 said...

Perceptive and quite interesting how life is played out by actors in a play, very classical. Nicely done,

bostonpoetry said...

Love this Glenn. I want to know what happens to Rod Buck. And I'm looking forward to this undescribed daughter. We learned so much about these characters in so little space. Great writing as always.

Cheers,
Mike

Madhura said...

Wow.. very intriguing. I love the characters.. want to know more of the daughter yet undescribed...

Ginny Brannan said...

I like the interesting quote you shared at the beginning.Never had read that before. And what for those pushing 55 with no money, I wonder. All downhill for us I guess! Your storyline to date has been quite intriguing, I must say.

bwfiction said...

surrounded by those men, she's going to be quite a character.

Gayle Walters Rose said...

You sure can cover a lot of territory in 55 little words and so entertaining too. Thanks for the homage to G-man...miss those days with him.

thecourseofourseasons.com said...

Love these snippets of your characters - so filled with drama - wonderful K

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Am smiling at the quote! Too bad I didnt lay aside more cash, hee hee! I enjoyed the poem, too!

Truedessa said...

Hi Glen,

Interesting character development, I was expecting an epic tale here..I will wait for the next installment.

The Bizza said...

This feels like a tightly-written recap. I love this story and can't wait for the next installment.

Marina Sofia said...

I love the quote - although I'm not quite sure how it relates to the poem. But I like the succinct, tight little character sketches here, very different from your usual widescreen format!

Brian Miller said...

interesting...a departure from how you usually handle this...almost like a catch up point for people...his daughter...i am intrigued...

Beth Winter said...

I am pleased to have personality. I'd better start working on that cash.

The scene has me wanting to read more. You've set it with great detail and I'm curious about the daughter. Well done.

grapeling said...

cool. you've distilled and yet whetted the appetite for more ~