Wednesday, March 8, 2017

Blackthorne--Scene Sixty.

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Cinemagenic Sixty


“Closure is bullshit.”--James Ellroy.

1(sound cue)  piano & violin.
2(medium close-up) Buck: Oh yes, I assure you that
we do have some unfinished business.
3(medium wide-shot) behind Buck & the Eagle. 
Bronson & the three wranglers were now mounted, 
but Thor still stood next to his mount, the raw anger 
evident in his brows & forehead.
4(crane three-shot) Thor, Buck, & Johnny--all were
standing like pugnacious ramrods.
5(sound cue) French horn & jazz brushing.
6(two-shot) Bronson leaning in toward Thor: Come 
on, brother. Plant that skinny butt of yours in saddle 
7(medium close-up) Thor: Cash, I really don’t like 
this raggedy-assed pair of trouble-makers.
8(two-shot) Buck & the Eagle reciprocating the 
9(close-up) Bronson : Hell, you don’t like anybody. 
Come on, shake a boot.
10(medium close-up) Thor stiffly stepped up onto his 
black, his eyes like coal: I’ll be seeing you, Mr. Buck.
You two are a couple of lucky assholes today.
11(sound cue) saxophone & tambourine.
12(two-shot) Buck, over Thor’s shoulder, through a 
smirk: I think the lady french-kissed us all.
13(two-shot) Bronson spun his Palomino around, 
flashing a stern look at his brother; I said, let’s ride.
14(medium wide-shot) Thor responded by rowelling 
his black mount into an immediate full gallop.
15(close-up) Bronson spiked his silver spurs into the 
golden sides of his stallion
16(sound cue) fast guitar strumming.
17(overhead crane medium wide-shot) The old 
wrangler started off next--the two ropes looped around 
Chatawa’s neck were double-lashed to his saddle-horn. 
The dappled stud strained & struggled against the lead. 
The other two pokes took up the rear, riding off without 
looking back.
18(stationary medium wide shot) 200 yards beyond 
the camp as we see the Bronsons galloping hard 
toward the lens--with Thor barely in the lead.
19(sound cue) pounding horse’s hooves over a 
20(hold the stationary shot) as Thor & Cash fill up 
the frame with their gallop-then ride over the top of it
21(overhead drone shot) tracking with the strung-out
five riders.
22(medium close-up) Cheewa chasing after the two 
drag riders barking & nipping at their horses hooves.
23(reverse two shot) Buck and Johnny, backs to the 
camera, standing and watching as the bellicose 
bunch were far enough away that they traveled on 
silent hooves, the steeds being swallowed up by a 
rust-gray dust cloud. 
24(sound cue) Indian seed rattle & blues guitar riff.
25( jump-cut to) a pair of prairie dogs, craning their
necks watching the wranglers depart.
26(sound cue) big angry dog barking over branch 

  Glenn Buttkus

Posted over at dVerse Poets Pub OLN


brudberg said...

Great tension in that parting... it's like a keg of powder ready to explode. I look forward to a meeting on a place more fair than this... I'm already looking forward to the next installment

Thotpurge said...

Wow the details are just fantastic!

Sanaa Rizvi said...

I agree, the level of tension and excitement was most tangible here! I too am awaiting the next installment❤️

Gayle Walters Rose said...

It doesn't feel like closure...I think much more is to come. I love reading all the details that you add to these scenes, Glenn. I can hear it when that Indian seed rattle sounds.

Therisa's World said...

Hi Glenn, had trouble reading your poem, due to one of my learning disabilities, which prevented me, from tracking this. What I was able to read, before I got lost, in your poem, is the masterful building of suspense, to the reader, with the tightness of your verses.

lynn__ said...

The music, sound of hooves, dogs barking...leave us hanging in the saddle of suspense!

Kim Russell said...

“Closure is bullshit.”--James Ellroy - this is such a good quote, short and to the point, and I agree with it. I love the phrase 'all were standing like pugnacious ramrods'! Those sound effects add so much to the tension.

scotthastiepoet said...

Skilfully done Glenn - your writing is always so sharp and confident..

Grace said...

I admire the quote, sounds, galloping horses,and ending shot of the steeds being swallowed up by a rust-gray dust cloud. Good chapter Glenn ~

Sarah Bawden said...

I have never read anything like this before and I loved it.

Truedessa said...

I have a blue corn rattle I bought at a pow wow - so the image of the rattle is very strong for me and of course I have to enjoy a blues guitar riff. You really have a talent of bringing music and visuals to life in your words. Most enjoyable tonight :)
I came over to read your installment.

Marina Sofia said...

Uh-oh, this sounds like an ending... hope you take it seriously that closure is nonsense and never closure!

Frank Hubeny said...

With memory nothing is ever closed. We just get breaks from our emotional attachment to it. I think you built up the tension well between these people and made us realize that the tension will not be released.

Bekkie Sanchez said...

This was like a movie! I enjoyed it.