Thursday, June 1, 2017

Blackthorne--Scene 64

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Cinemagenic Sixty-Four


“Our intentions can create our reality.”
--Wayne Dyer.

1(sound cue) piano & banjo
2(close-up) Buck: “While we’re at it, we’ll pay a little
visit to Cash Bronson.”
3(two-shot) Johnny, over Buck’s shoulder: Maldito--
just like that--just dance into his office after what we
just went through with him?
4(two-shot) Buck: Sure, why not? The look on his
face will be priceless. He will never expect us so
5(medium close-up) Johnny: And what business will
we have with this hijo de puta ?
6(two-shot) Buck, over Johnny’s shoulder: I will make
him an offer to buy Chatawa. I figure he respects a 
dollar more than most gents. I can pay him as much
as a hundred dollars. We’ll get the stud back before
Bronson gets used to having him.
7(sound cue) harmonica.
8(medium close-up) Johnny: My Buck, you have 
cojones the size of apples--but I would not count on
that cabron accepting your offer. He is out to teach
you your place in his world.
9(close-up) Buck: We will walk in like the sunshine
boys, all smiling & neighborly, being positive--confident
he will sell.
10(overhead crane shot) Buck standing, Johnny working
on Bob’s leg. POV from the hayloft. A packrat scampers
through the frame with a red ribbon in its mouth.
11(sound cue) Johnny’s laugh.
12(two-shot) Johnny: Yes, There is a small chance you 
can buy the stallion. For money, I think Bronson would
whore out his own mother at the China Doll.
13(medium close-up) Buck: I thought she already worked
there--some of those putas are pretty long in the tooth.
14(sound cue) both men laughing over saloon player piano. 
15(medium wide shot) Buck slapped Johnny on the shoulder
& walked to the open barn door.
16(reverse wide shot) from outside, Buck standing tall in the
open doorway, the sun dipping toward the horizon, the
mustangs milling about in the adjacent corral.
17(two-shot) Buck facing the camera, Johnny to his left:
I tell you, we will make something out of this ghost ranch
18(medium close-up) Johnny: If we bring Chatawa back 
here, he will stud his way into glory.
19(medium two-shot) Buck: Tomorrow we’ll head into
town & get some grub, some paint & lumber, & another
good axe.
Johnny: What about wire ?
Buck: No fucking wire.
Johnny: Bronson strings barbed wire.
Buck: Exactly. 
20(medium wide shot) Buck strolled out into the late
citrus sunshine, The Eagle concentrated on Bob’s leg.
21(sound cue) Voice-over, Johnny, over soft snare

drum brushing: Crazy as cago.

Glenn Buttkus

Posted over at dVerse Poets Pub OLN


brudberg said...

Oh.. love the banter, and the attitude... doubt that he will sell... a citrus sun is so very atmospheric. Already longing for the next installment

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Such fiery attitude in this installment, Glenn! I am with Bjorn on this one, can't hardly wait for the next one!

Blogoratti said...

Profound, and a delight.

Kim Russell said...

I'm sorry I didn't get around to commenting last night, Glenn, but I was so tired and couldn't read the screen, with or without my glasses! It's morning now and I'm a little fresher and enjoying Blackthorne. It's amazing to think that you're up to Cinemagenic Sixty-Four.
That's a great quotation from Wayne Dyer, by the way!
As usual, I am listening to the sound cues - the piano, banjo and harmonica are so atmospheric.
I love the classic reverse wide shot from outside, and can see 'Buck standing tall in the
open doorway, the sun dipping toward the horizon, the
mustangs milling about in the adjacent corral'.

Petru Viljoen said...

A couple of guys have been done in, they face adversity, they have dreams and hopes to get the horse. Not a girl/woman in sight anywhere - the rat with the red ribbon is an omen for sure. Poetry. said...

You do know I almost always do my reading the morning after the post, right? Hot steamy coffee in hand. I missed this while on the cruise!
I do love these posts of yours. The details are always so amazing to me...that packrat this time with the red ribbon (a leftover ribbon from a gal's bonnet who had a tumble in the hay some time ago?) and I always watch for the harmonica to cue in. Question for you...what is a POV? Not familiar with that.
And this time the image is superb. I really locked in on it and it took me a few seconds to get my eyes to go down and do the reading. It's really a mesmorizing image.
Well, I for one want Buck to get Chatawa back! Next week?
PS: have your scripts ever been used in movies, Glenn? Is that in your background? You have such a way with what I call the Western. Do you write it each week....or is the finished product sitting somewhere and you give us parts each time?

Grace said...

sunshine boys and citrus sunshine...I like the scene, attitude and hope they are successful.

good morning from sunny Toronto!!!

scotthastiepoet said...

So sorry Glenn, unexpected visitors last night have made me rather late in responding to your piece. But once again you are a master painter - your craft is very telling and so well honed now, it simply sings along...

Marina Sofia said...

Had to check out what cago meant - right, am wiser now.
Clearly, a LOT of attitude and bluster going on there...

Glenn Buttkus said...

Lillian--I wrote a Western novel, BLACKTHORNE, in 1968. It has never been published. I review it, & rewrite sections of it as poetic screenplay; a lot of work, bit still joyous fun. I'm about a third of the way through the manuscript. Of course, now I write more dialogue, and reshape some of the scenes. I wrote a screenplay for a short film, LOVE HURTS, in 2006. It went into production, but lost funding before completion. I was a professional actor for a decade, 1970-1980. Thanks for asking. POV means "point of view", where the camera is focused.

Anonymous said...

Love that quote from Wayne Dyer. In fact, I always look forward to the quotes that you use...I enjoy them immensely. I look forward to seeing how these guys manage trying to get their horse back...good luck with that! Always fun to read your "episodes" Glenn.