Zorba’s Song
A triolet
“I love you too much not to tell you,
A man needs a little madness.”
forget feeling blue--
I love you too much not to tell you
as my words bite like a shrew;
for you must cut adrift your calmness.
I love you too much not to tell you,
A man needs a little madness.
Glenn Buttkus
March 2012
Listed as #2 over at dVerse Poets-FFA
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16 comments:
Enjoyed the reading. It gave it texture and veracity. Captures Zorba - an emotion, a truth. Very musical, and also compact. Very fluid.
smiles..i agree with gay...very musical as well..just like a triolet should be...but wilder than the french thought it first i guess...but that's exactly what i like here..smiles
"A man needs a little madness." ... I agree!
The trick to the triolet seems to be selecting good repeating lines, which you have done. Nice job!
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
I love this! Great piece. The refrain lines are spectacular, especially "A man needs a little madness." Thanks for sharing!
maybe a little maddness. but a lot is dysfunctional.
BTW - verification is really a pain in the .... I bet you'd get more comments if you turned it off
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(after i wrote that, it failed the first time, i really don't like verification)
cool write. So true a little madness can be a good thing. definite neat tone here.
I read all four and this one is my favorite with the third one trailing closely behind.
love is a bit of madness in itself isnt it...smiles...def some nice lyricism...careful of that bite man...
sorry i am late, word verification does not work on older IE and that is all i have when i am out and about...
This is excellent! The triolet form signed, sealed, delivered.
Very nice. I love the fifth line. It makes the triolet for me. Peace, Linda
I'm totally convinced, both by the form and the thought.
Cannot express how meaningful this is for me (long story how Zorba and an older man who resembled him each affected my life in profound ways). Suffice to say that I am going to "borrow" this photo of Zorba for my own blog, while keeping your reading in my memory.
It was too good to just keep in memory; I linked the image back to your post.
So beautiful!!!
Love it!
Peeps need to watch La Strada, that is Zorba at his cinematic finest.....
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